P5

EVALUATION OF FEEDBACK 

Most of the feedback that I received relates to the format of my script and the types of shot needed to convey the scenes better. I also need to improve on certain bits of dialogue. 

Despite the feedback stating that the "the grammar is perfect, the script makes sense and is rather compelling" - I still feel that I have a long way to go in terms of completing the script and making it more interesting/compelling to read.

Now I will be focusing on fine-tuning the dialogue, creating the shooting script and being more concise with the action lines and the descriptions.

Using the feedback I have received as a guideline, I tweaked some of the dialogue from the characters in each scene and spaced out the action lines. I've also added the shot types with some having directions on the pans and positioning. I felt that the shot composition that I've added on the script will help to make the dialogue and the atmosphere of each scene as more intense- with a lot of close ups on crucial sections of the story.